The two pie charts compare the different sources on which children charity in the USA had spend and received money in the year 2016.
In 2016, the
children
charity have Change noun form
children's
recive diffrent
incomesCorrect your spelling
received different
and
, in Correct word choice
apply
this
two comparative graphs Correct determiner usage
these
is
represented Unnecessary verb
apply
in
what they take or spend.
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apply
Overall
, the charts are diveden
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divided
in
what they Change preposition
into
recive
and what Correct your spelling
receive
the
spend. Comparing how the money is Correct your spelling
they
divenden
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divided
in
their needs and the Change preposition
into
percentage
that they consider to evrey
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every
asspect
. The things that they Correct your spelling
aspect
recive
are vital to the charity because are things Correct your spelling
receive
such
as donated food, community contributions, donations
from the goverments
, and others. It's an expensive program Correct your spelling
governments
government
nevertheless
, they have more ingress that
what they spend.
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than
sources
the Add a comma
,sources
percentage
are
a little in Change the verb form
is
disporpotion
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distortion
disproportion
due to
the food donations
are
massive because is of 86.6% and, Wrong verb form
being
then
the other sources start at ten percentage
and dicrease
. Correct your spelling
decrease
Although
, they have Correct article usage
a varity
varity
of sources Correct your spelling
variety
for
example, community Add the comma(s)
,for
donations
, government grants, program revenue, etc.
In the expeditures
chart. Correct your spelling
expenditures
expenditure
it's
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it
represent
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represents
less
factors. The highest number that we can see is the Change the quantifier
fewer
incomes
that they put Fix the agreement mistake
income
in
Change preposition
into
the programs services
, Change to a genitive case
the program's services
the services of the program
that
is Correct pronoun usage
which
of
95.8%. Leaving Change preposition
apply
managment
and general with 1.6% and 2.6% fundraising. Meanwhile, the Correct your spelling
management
percentage
are
very Change the verb form
is
opposites
the total of spend is $53,224,896 and the Fix the agreement mistake
opposite
incomes
is $53,561,580 so the Fix the agreement mistake
income
children
charity programs as a big cost but it's Change noun form
children's
afforable
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affordable
due to
the donations
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