The two pie charts compare the different sources on which children charity in the USA had spend and received money in the year 2016.

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In 2016, the

children

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charity have

recive diffrent

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received different

incomes

and

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, in

this

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two comparative graphs

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represented

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what they take or spend.

Overall

, the charts are

diveden

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divided

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what they

recive

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receive

and what

the

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they

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spend. Comparing how the money is

divenden

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divided

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their needs and the

percentage

that they consider to

evrey

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every

asspect

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aspect

. The things that they

recive

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receive

are vital to the charity because are things

such

as donated food, community contributions,

donations

from the

goverments

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governments

government

, and others. It's an expensive program

nevertheless

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what they spend. In the revenue

sources

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the

percentage

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a little in

disporpotion

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distortion

disproportion

due to

the food

donations

are

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massive because is of 86.6% and,

then

the other sources start at ten

percentage

and

dicrease

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decrease

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, they have

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varity

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variety

of sources

for

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example, community

donations

, government grants, program revenue, etc. In the

expeditures

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expenditures

expenditure

chart.

it's

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represent

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less

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factors. The highest number that we can see is the

incomes

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income

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that they put

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the programs services

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the program's services

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that

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95.8%. Leaving

managment

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management

and general with 1.6% and 2.6% fundraising. Meanwhile, the

percentage

are

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very

opposites

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the total of spend is $53,224,896 and the

incomes

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income

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is $53,561,580 so the

children

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charity programs as a big cost but it's

afforable

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affordable

due to

the

donations

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "due to".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, donations with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "represented" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

211 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

charitable organization
non-profit sector
financial allocation
philanthropy
government subsidies
individual contributors
fundraising activities
expenditure breakdown
financial transparency
budgetary constraints
donor base
revenue streams
fiscal responsibility
overheads
sustainability

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The two pie charts compare the different sources on which children charity in the USA had spend and received money in the year 2016.

Some people think that public health of a country can be improved if the government make laws regarding nutritious food but others think that it is the matter of personal choice and personal responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

- [x] Obesity in children is a serious problem in a number of countries. What are the causes of obesity in children? Discuss the possible alarming effects of this problem in the future.

Some people believe that violence on television and in computer games has a damaging effect on the society. Others deny that these factors have any significant influence on people's behaviour. What is your opinion?

in many countries, the level of crimes is increasing and crimes are becoming more violent. what are the main causes? how can we deal with it?

In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.