Throughout history, people have dreamed of living in a perfect society, but they have not agreed on what an ideal society would be like. What do you think is the most important element of a perfect society in the modern world? How can people work towards achieving an ideal society?

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are searching for an ideal

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no one has perfected it yet.

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my understanding,

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can be defined as a close knitted community where an individual can live self-content, healthily and peacefully. It is not overtly impossible to build

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a community,

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it requires persistence from the individual and determination from the government.

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with, since the origin of ,humans it is easily observed that they are never self-satisfied and always trying to achieve better than others.

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has led to

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with jealousy and insecurity towards other

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or nations.

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, these two elements have brought wars that nearly destroyed one-third of the world and left the other one-third in misery.

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, if we are to build a better place to live, every individual must not be the envy of one another and should be content with what they have.

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can be made a reality if each person on the planet persistently respects and be humble to one another.

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, the government should carefully plan and execute a decent

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for all citizens no matter what race or religion they belong to. They should provide all the basic facilities free of cost

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as clean air to breathe, pure water to drink and equal job opportunities to survive.

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, educational institutes, hospitals, and public transport facilities should be provided to the taxpayers without corruption and unjust.

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healthy establishment with determination from governing bodies will make all the individuals self-content and peaceful.

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convergent contribution from the individual and government can lead to a perfect

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where no foreseeable wars are envisioned, and

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can live happily ever after.

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Throughout history, people have dreamed of living in a perfect society, but they have not agreed on what an ideal society would be like. What do you think is the most important element of a perfect society in the modern world? How can people work towards achieving an ideal society?

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