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In the future, more people will choose to go on holidays in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree?

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In the coming years, the majority of
people
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 will prefer travelling within their own
country
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 than visiting a foreign land for their vacations.
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 essay agrees with the same as
people
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 nowadays want to understand their own
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's cultural and geographical diversities
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 high inflation rates in the economy are making it luxurious for some to cross the border and enjoy a holiday abroad.
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, before the pandemic of COVID-19, it was most
people
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's dream to go and visit different cultures all around the world and gather knowledge and experience of the world unseen.
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, the
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 restrictions to board an Aeroplan were not strict and anyone with a valid passport or visa could
travel
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.
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, travelling long miles by air or any other mode of transport was inexpensive. The pandemic has changed the way
people
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 used to look at overseas
travel
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. Additional requirements to
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 were introduced by authorities and itineraries became dear.
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 gave rise to intra-national tourism.
People
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, with not many options to spend their vacation
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, choose to visit a state or province in their own
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 unexplored by them before. The increasing price of conveyance and accommodation
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 became a discouraging factor. Even though it doesn't affect the wealthy percentage of citizens, the proles have to give a second thought before planning a holiday in a second
country
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.
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 trend is increasing slowly and holiday goers are selecting alternate destinations for their breaks. As the trend depicts, in near future, more and more
people
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 will spend their off-times in their own
country
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 rather than spending a lot of dollars on
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 arrangements to other countries.
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