The given charts give information about the number of students at university in the UK from 1991 to 2001, government spending and the types of family economic background they came from in 1991.

The given charts give information about the number of students at university in the UK from 1991 to 2001, government spending and the types of family economic background they came from in 1991.
The graphs illustrate the proportion of
students
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on family economic background, how many
students
are studying at university in the UK and the government spending on every student.
Overall
, the government and
family
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families
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put a lot of effort and money into
universities'
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education in 1991,
while
the percentage of
students
attending university was still low.
Firstly
, the proportion of
students
by family economic background with middle income took the first place with 62% in 1991. The percentage of
students
in families with high income and low income
were
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30% and 8% respectively.
Secondly
, the number of
students
at university in the UK increased significantly between 1991 and 1999, starting from 1000000
students
and
peaked
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at 2100000
students
in 1999.
This
number slightly decreased from 2100000 to 2000000 in the next 3 years.
On the other hand
, the amount of government spending on each student dropped sharply from 6500 pounds to around 4800 pounds between 1991 and 1996.
This
amount was almost unchanged from 1996 to 2001.
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