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Nowadays, the trend of relocating living countries was more popular, then at past times.

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Nowadays, the trend of relocating living
countries
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 was more popular,
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then
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at
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past
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the past
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 times.
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commission
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a commission
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 of international immigration of
USA
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the USA
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 registered 5 hundred thousand official immigrants, how much unofficial no one knew. Why does
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 happen, someone can ask a question. Let's talk about that.
First
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 possible reason,
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is because
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because
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that
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people
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 want to find
good
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a good
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work place
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workplace
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. To be honest, a great number of
people
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 are not satisfied
from
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with
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 the place where they
work
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, and there are many points why they hate them. One man because he does not want to
work
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 there,
other
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another
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 one because he hates to
work
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 in his
country
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.
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common
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the common
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 salary is around 150 thousand
tenge
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, which is around 300 converting to dollars,
however
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, in USA common salary is around 500 dollars,
this
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 is
quite
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a quite
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big
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a big
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 difference, to be honest.
Second
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 reason is relevant for
third world
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third-world
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countries
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, it became impossible to live in your
country
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 and you want to
immigrate
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 to another
country
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. So that you understand, there are
countries
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, like SAR (Republic of South Africa), in which wars take place, and
people
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 to save their
life
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immigrate
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 from
such
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countries
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 to safer places, like
USA
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the USA
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, France, and others.
To conclude
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 everything,
people
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immigrate
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 for
better
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a better
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life
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, some
people
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 because they want to earn a greater salary, someone want to save
his
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their
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life
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, because in his native
country
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 war broke out. So,
people
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 mainly decide to
immigrate
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 for
better
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a better
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life
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, and after that they decide by their heart, or something like that.

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