The maps underneath describes the changes that have taken place in and around Queen Mary Hospital since its building in 1960 till 2000
The maps underneath
describes
the changes that have taken place in and around Queen Mary Hospital since its building in 1960 till 2000.
Change the verb form
describe
Overall
, in the next 40 years
shopping
Correct article usage
the shopping
centre
and farmland was
demolished and replaced by Correct subject-verb agreement
were
cancer
Correct article usage
a cancer
centre
and nursing school, hospital
was expanded, and Correct article usage
the hospital
car
Correct article usage
the car
park
in the period of
1980 and 2000 Change preposition
between
years
was shortened by half.
Since 1960, hospital
was changed amazingly. In the next 20 Add an article
the hospital
years
it was expanded to Add a comma
,years
shopping
Correct article usage
a shopping
centre
side with additional
building unit, Correct article usage
an additional
that
was Correct pronoun usage
which
pharmacy
department. Correct article usage
the pharmacy
Same
year Add an article
The same
shopping
Correct article usage
the shopping
centre
was replaced by cancer
Correct article usage
a cancer
centre
, and it was expanded in till
Change preposition
until
2000
year.
There was built Change the article
the 2000
a
nursing school in 1980, that replaced farmland located on the left side of the Correct article usage
apply
car
park
. However
, in the next 20 years
it was shortened by half, Add a comma
,years
such
as car
Correct article usage
the car
park
and replaced car
Correct article usage
the car
park
left side. Empty space was transferred to cancer
Add an article
the cancer
a cancer
centre
, and it
space was increased by three times.Change the pronoun
its
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, centre, car, park with synonyms.
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