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Some oeple think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult ought to be optional instead of compulsary. To what extend to you agree?

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In recent times,
people
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 give valuable importance to education. Some individuals think that
children
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 find lots of difficult to
learn-
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learn subjects
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subjects
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such
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 as mathematics and philosophy.
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people
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 say that make
this
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 subject optional rather than compulsory. In my opinion, I totally agree with
this
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 statement. So it leads to the loss of
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children
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children's
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 valuable
time
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 and makes mental issues.
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 with,
children
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 find it difficult to study every subject in their academic
life
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.
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 ,
children
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 have different tastes in their careers. Some
children
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's ambition is to become an artist.
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 there is no need to waste their
time
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 learning mathematical and Philosophy knowledge in their
life
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. To explain,
people
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 who are more ambitious about their
life
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. So trying to choose to study
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 their wise.
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this
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 reason, made difficult
subjects
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 in the education system
optional
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instead
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compulsory
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of compulsory
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 because it is a waste of
time
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.
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, In school lifetime ,
children
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 did not have any idea about their future and talents. If push the
children
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 to learn tough
subjects
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, which is led to depression and other health problems,
otherwise
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 give the option to help them to enjoy their school
life
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 and
also
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 the learning process.
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, in many cases reported in the world,
children
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 face problems in their academic
life
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 because of studying difficult
subjects
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 in schools.
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 some
subject
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 were made optional for
children
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. In conclusion, a section of society believes that
children
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 face many issues because of learning difficult
subjects
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 in their schools. So
people
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 say make some
subjects
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 optional rather than compulsory. I totally agree with
this
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 viewpoint. Because in my opinion,it is a waste of
time
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 to learn unnecessary things at the same
time
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 it makes mental problems in
children
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.
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