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How social media affects our daily life. Do you agree with this statement or disagree

#media #life
Nowadays many
people
 agree that life without social
media
 is hilarious and
thay
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they
 can't even imagine
typical
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a typical
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 day without posting memories on
the
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apply
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instagram
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. From my
poit
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point
 of
view
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its
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it
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 could predict
real
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a real
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 Community and
people
 could forget how to spend time together without social
media
.
Firstly
, we need our phones to communicate with each other
on
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 a distance. After
instagram
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Instagram
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 was
found
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,
people
 start using their phones for business, uploading photos from vacation and start getting followers. Society understands that you could follow
people
who
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 you
thing
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think
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 motivates you and be like friends, you reply
on
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to
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 stories she might answer you and earn some money from activity on her page. More and more
people
 understand that median life is more advanced and interesting
that
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than
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 going to
office
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the office
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 and
get
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salary
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 every month. So that's why
people
 start thinking
how
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about how
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 to post something vibing that
people
 could like it. Obviously, nowadays before we eat something we need to take
photo
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a photo
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 of it and post
in
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it
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 on social
media
, before going out you
need
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 take
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a phoyo
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phoyo
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photos
photo
 of your look of the day and upload
for
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them for
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people
's reaction.
Besides
 that,
people
 forget how to communicate with each other, and that's why we have
problem
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problems
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 with lonely issues. All thing considered, I could completely agree with
this
 statement that Social
media
affacts
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affects
 tha dayly
lifes
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lives
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 and produce problems in the future.
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