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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
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In the opinion of
people
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 who believe that
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professionals
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 should only
work
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 where they were trained, they have the view of communitarianism. These
people
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 believe that if someone has special skills or talents, they have to use them for a better nation or group. For them, the objectives of the group are more important than the individuals’ own values or goals. So they want the
professionals
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 who are talented and
skillful
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 to
work
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 for their group, not for others including
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 themselves.
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, in the opinion of
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 who believe contrary to them have the view of liberalism. They value the individuals’ needs more than anything else
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 if those needs do not give damages to other
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. They believe the
country
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 where
professionals
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work
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 is depending on their
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, and it is not a thing that other
people
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 can restrict. In my opinion, I agree with the
people
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 who have liberalism more.
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professionals
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 became
skillful
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 thanks to their self-encouragement not because of their
country
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. Countries might support them,
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, their
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 is the major reason that makes them
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. So there is no reason that they need to remain in their
country
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.
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if they go to another
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 for
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, they can be treated better and learn more things than remaining in their countries. No one can have
professionals
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 give up the opportunities. In conclusion, Because of these reasons, I believe that
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 should be free to choose which
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 to
work
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 in.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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