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some people think its better to choose friends who always have the same openion as them. Other people believe its good to have friends who some time disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own openion.

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 the meaning of friendship has taken a different turn.Some individuals make friends with similar characteristics
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 theirs ,
while
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 others do the opposite.In
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will discuss both views
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 I strongly agree with the latter statement.
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 who think alike are more likely to build strong relationships with each other.In doing
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 they understand their problems in a way they feel and can give them a better solution.
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, teenagers who find themselves in some unusual situation can communicate with their friends
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 they believe can understand them better than
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someone
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 who will not.
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of
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which they feel more secure and comfortable.
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 being with
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 who agrees with you has its own
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advantage,
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 it
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 holds some drawbacks.
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,if you are gaining success by doing wrong things
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you will never learn the difference between right and wrong and be under the impression that whatever you have achieved in life is only because of your
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 whether it is in a good way or bad.
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,there are a group of
people
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 who like to hang out with
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 who can point out mistakes and disagree with them when they are
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wrong.Individuals feel that
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people
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 teach them to learn from their mistakes
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 is important in life.
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,being with
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 who opposes you makes you think in a broader way and helps
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 to exchange various ideas from different angles.To illustrate,it has been reported that
people
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 of opposite views have good knowledge and their minds are more open and
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they carry
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 themselves more confidently in public.
To conclude
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 ,being with
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 with similar opinions makes a friendship stronger
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, but
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 does not help to differentiate things
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interacting
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, interacting
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 with the opposite helps us to become more successful in life.

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structure
Use a clear plan: intro, two body parts, and a short final thought. Keep one idea per paragraph and link ideas with simple words.
grammar
Fix small grammar and spell errors. Use simple verb forms and correct articles.
content
Give more real examples and explain why they show the point. Make links between ideas clearer.
task response
Clear view is stated in the intro and in the end.
coherence
Use of 'On the other hand' and 'To begin with' shows flow.
structure
Two clear paragraphs with examples.
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