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It is important to ensure that children with a wide range of abilities and from a variety of social backgrounds mix with each other at school.

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Nowadays, so many movements to support diversity include in
school
. A wide range of abilities and various social backgrounds mixed with each other at
school
 is important to our society. In my point of view, I agree with
this
 statement, and I will give the reasons for
this
. Social development is important for us as human beings. We come from many backgrounds,
such
 as religion, tribes and nationality. In
school
, the
children
 are prepared to be ready for the future, including how to socialize with other people in the real world. Various abilities show that they can be anything in their life.
For example
, they will have good communication and know how to adapt their self to a new environment.
On the other hand
, racism often happens
for
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 minorities, it will bring them to be victims of bullying, and it is not good for
children
's mental health. For illustrate, if someone has a different
color
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, she will get bullied and it will be a
long term
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 trauma. In schools with different
background
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, the students learn how to respect other people by know their friends. I strongly agree that it is essential to make sure
children
are mix
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 with each other because background is not important. The important is how the
children
 know to respect each other and they know that they need other people to live.
For instance
, as a teacher working in a private
school
 with many religions, we always care about each other; when someone
have
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 a big day like
christmas
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 or ied, we always  make some greeting cards for our friends and show that we are happy
of
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 them.
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