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Some people are of the view that only university education can ensure success, whereas many others oppose this view. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#people #university #education #success
Academic study can be avouch of success. In
this
 essay, I will attempt to outline both Ideas and provide my perspective .when
people
 study at a
,
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all academic
university
 they will have
More
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 discipline and
people
 will respect them more and after that they will have a
job
 that maybe they can earn
money
 from when
people
 respect you you may have more options to work and earn
money
 after that when you’re educated from a higher level
university
 you'll find
job
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 and
people
 will give you more positions to work. When you are spending your
time
 on a purpose and a goal life will be more add visible and you can leave your life and take your
time
 better
then
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 the person that doesn't go to college or doesn't have
university
degrees
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degree
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 after studying at
university
 you can find it
more easy
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 to find what you love and how you want to spend your
time
 and how you want to earn
money
. In
this
 paragraph I will talk about why
people
 can be successful by not going to
the
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university
 or having Academic degrees There are some
people
 that go to
bazaar
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 and will run a
job
 for themselves And after running a
job
the
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they
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 can be older building an institute or a lot of things like they don't have to spend their
time
 to study some specific Lessons to pass
Then
 they’ll have more
time
 to find what they love and find more Reasons to earn
money
 some
people
 may follow their family path to earn
money
 it’s like a legacy to them so by spending more
time
 on what they can have and what they can do they'll be more successful or they'll be sooner successful than the
people
 that have been educated their whole life.
To sum up
 I think
people
 must follow their hearts .
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