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Some people are of the view that only university education can ensure success, whereas many others oppose this view. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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It is believed by society that just by having a high education degree you can be successful
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 others do not consider
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 a necessity. In
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 essay, I will attempt to outline both ideas and provide my perspective. On the one hand, it is argued that the first goal of studying at a university is to help their students get the right career that leads to their success. The main reason is that some highly paid positions in a business require the employee to have an educational institution higher education.
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,being employed by big companies is mostly dependent on your studies and for some of these employers, even the name of your university is vital in order to be accepted.
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, today social media businesses have made so many people wealthy that it seems these days all you have to own for a high income is a smartphone and some editing knowledge so that you can be counted as a content creator or a blogger with 1 k number of followers which can be considered as a successful carrier especially, by the younger generation. In my opinion,
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 can vary based on each individual character,
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, to some people studying and having a degree is going to be the tool they need in order to do well
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 to others the most important achievement they need to have is having a bigger network.
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, in conclusion, I acknowledge the fact that university education is the ideal way to get a beneficial job but at the same time, good skills and personal abilities are
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 essential to lead to a successful person.
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