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Nowadays parents are forcing their ward to do part time jobs in their free time . Write the advantages and disadvantages of this phenomena.

#parents #ward #part #time #jobs #phenomena
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These days competition has increased in every field . So , skills play
vital
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 role in
this
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 situation.
Parental
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are
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encorage
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encourage
encouraged
 their children to do
internship
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internships
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 and enhance their knowledge.
In
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this
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phenomena
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phenomenon
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 have pros and cons,
therefore
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, I will discuss
in
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 the ensuing
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paragraphs
.
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 with , there
are
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plathora
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plethora
 advantage of
part
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part-time
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time
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work
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 .
Firstly
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,
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the student
a student
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student
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students
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 will learn
fincial
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financial
 management and they
also
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now
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know
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parents struggle to earn money.
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 , in
usa
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USA
, when
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a child
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child
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children
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 become 18 years old,
that
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apply
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they earn money and support
family
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the family
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.
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, when youth do
part
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part-time
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time
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job
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jobs
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, it will
rise
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raise
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 their confidence .
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,
books
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book
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knowlegde
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knowledge
 is very limited and
th eory
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theory
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based
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is based
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. Students would not gain practical
knowlegde
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knowledge
 in the classroom .
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,
internshipwill
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internship will
 be
rise
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raise
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 their intelligence.
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 , recently
collage
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college
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 added rules for learners that folks who study in
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last
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the last
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 year of the course,
they
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work
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 with companies as
intern
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 and
then
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to
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give degree
certificate
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certificates
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.
On the other hand
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 , there are
also
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same
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some
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 drawbacks . Nowadays , the ratio of mental and physical health issues has
been
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increased because children can not
work
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parallely
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parallelly
parallel
. To illustrate ,
the
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 survey of
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time
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the time
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 of
india
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, 68% of youth are suffered
health
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from health
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 issues.
Moreover
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,
student
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the student
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 can not focus on their study, it
is directly impact
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 on their grade. In conclusion , in the
competition
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 era, people need to
equired
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acquire
 advanced skills and experience .So, it is
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the
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best way to learn field knowledge in
part
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part-time
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time
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work
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.
Similarly
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, theoretical understanding is
also
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 as important.
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