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You are a member of Newcomers Association of Prince Edward Island (PEI), Canada which meets regularly at 'Maid Marians'. During last visit, you all met at 'Maid Marians' but food served there was not satisfactory. write a letter to the manager. In your letter, • explain what went wrong • suggest what should be done to ensure that you and your group return to the restaurant • describe any experience that you appreciate yet

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Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing for the Newcomers Association of PEI. We often meet at your
restaurant
 for lunch or dinner.
Last
 Saturday, we had a reunion of members at your
restaurant
. Unfortunately, the meal was not good. I want to say that, we ordered chicken and that was not cooked properly.
Apart from
this
 Lentil Curry was
also
 too much spicy.
Moreover
, the server was
also
 slow but we told him about
this
 and he appreciated our request which was totally positive for us. We will not come to your
restaurant
 until you give us assurance that
this
 will not happen again in future.
However
, our all past experiences in your
restaurant
 were totally appreciatable
such
 as, your staff was so polite, food of your
restaurant
 was fresh and healthy that's why we came to your
restaurant
 frequently. I hope you solve
this
 matter and waiting for your positive reply. Yours Sincerely, Sophia Brown.
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coherence cohesion
In terms of coherence and cohesion, consider providing more explicit transitions between points to enhance the logical structure of your letter. This will guide the reader more smoothly through your different observations and requests.
task achievement
For task achievement, while the letter addresses all parts of the task, adding more specific details or suggestions on how the restaurant can improve the food quality would strengthen your response.
suitable writing tone
The tone of your letter is polite and appropriate for the situation, which is essential in maintaining a constructive dialogue.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing of the letter are well-structured, providing a professional and courteous framework for your message.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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