The average standard of people's health is likely to be lower in the future than it is now. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Recently,
health
is one of the most important non material
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non-material
thing
in our lives. It does not matter how much money you have Change to a plural noun
things
on
your wallet, more often Change preposition
in
physical
statement is something Add an article
the physical
what
you cannot buy. Change the word
that
Moreover
, our generation that is
the society, which is have worse quality of health
that
other generations. Correct word choice
than
Furthermore
, according to
this
, I would assert, that in the future population would have lower
Correct article usage
a lower
health
average.
Firstly
, one of the most health
decrease factors would be our unhealthy lifestyle, especially teenagers. Nowadays, the
society forgot about the importance of Correct article usage
apply
the
Correct article usage
apply
sport
activity and healthy nutrition. Increased consumption of fast food we can reveal by the fast Change the noun form
sports
grow
of food courts in the streets, shopping Replace the word
growth
centers
and Change the spelling
centres
others
possible places for them. Correct quantifier usage
other
Moreover
, despite the warnings about the consequences of fast food, there is
so many Correct subject-verb agreement
are
adds
and posters around the world which is provoсe and promote Correct your spelling
ads
this
unhealthy nutrition. Sport activity now is understands
Wrong verb form
understood
like
Change preposition
as
burden
for a person and every time they forgot choose stay home and watch Add an article
a burden
series
Correct article usage
a series
instead
of 30 minutes workout or just a simple walk outside. The most important, understand that healthy
lifestyle Correct article usage
a healthy
never
cannot be a burden, he is always has a benefit for us.
Rewrite the sentence
apply
Secondly
increased usage of alcohol
. Alcohol
abuse, one
of the most dangerous and Add a missing verb
is one
wide ranging
diseases nowadays. Add a hyphen
wide-ranging
Additionally
, the problem seems much bigger when we realize, that in many countries, usage of alcohol
have
many rules, Change the verb form
has
for example
: we cannot drink and buy alcoholic goods under the age of 20; the time of buying alcoholic products is limited. And despite this
, usage of boose
Correct your spelling
booze
is still grow
up.
Change the verb form
is still grown
is still growing
To sum up
, the problems increased of unhealthy lifestyle
and Fix the agreement mistake
lifestyles
alcohol
abuse around the world, have a big impact for
us nowadays and will have in the future. Change preposition
on
That
is
clearly shows, that Unnecessary verb
apply
the
future generations would Correct article usage
apply
be have
lower Change the verb form
have
health
than us.Submitted by evaivodiss2005 on
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