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The graph below shows the numbers of overseas visitors who went to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the numbers of overseas visitors who went to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line chart illustrates the
quantity
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 of visitors from other countries who visited three various areas in a European country, which were the
coast
, mountains and lakes, between the
year
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years
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 1987 and 2007. The general trend showed that people who visited these places mainly increased over the years,
although
 there was a little fall between the year 2002 to 2007 for foreigners visiting the lakes, from approximately 75
thousands
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 to 50
thousands
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. Travellers who travelled to the
coast
 in 1987 were the highest compared to the other 2 areas, reaching a total number of 40 thousand people.
Moreover
, it can be observed that the
visitors
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 who visited the lakes increased at a faster rate compared to those who visited the
coast
 and mountains, where the steepest increase occur between 1997 to 2002.
At
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In
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 the year 2007, the number of travellers
at
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on
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 the
coast
 was at
the
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its
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 highest around 75
thousands
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thousand
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due to
 the steady increase since 15 years ago.
However
, the number of overseas visitors
at
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to
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 the mountains was less than half of that.
Therefore
, the graph gives us a complete illustration of the spread of overseas travellers
at
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in
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 different areas of the European country.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coast with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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