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Today, many young people spend too much of their free time at shopping malls. This can be considered negative for young people and society generally. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #time #malls #society
Nowadays, more and more
people
 choose to go to the shopping stores in their spare time,
however
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 it is more than expected. At large, it does not evaluate positively in order to young adults and
community
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. In
this
 essay, I will explain why I am
compelety
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completely
 agree with
this
 case and what
people
 should prefer to do in leisure. First of all, in
this
 point of view, in modern days, a lot of
people
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and adolesents
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adolesents
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adolescents
 continue to go to malls
where
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 have lots of shops, restaurants and cafes. The main reason can be that young
people
 go for
shop
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the shop
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 to follow trends and buy new clothing and
other
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 one can
be go
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 to
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restaurants with their friends or to watch a new movie at the cinema.
However
, all these activities have a negative effect
to
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 society and they just spend their life
doin
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doing
doin'
such
 unnecessary activities. They should
do
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go to the
book shops
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bookshops
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 and take a new book which they can easily read
instead
 of
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 plenty of time at malls and join to a new language
cource
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course
 which has
positive
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 effect
to
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 their life.
To conclude
,it definitely has
minus
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a minus
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 effect,
unfortunately
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unfortunately,
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the
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most of society doing
such
a
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 unimperative thing I would like to state that in today's
days
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people
 have to choose the most important things which
it
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apply
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can
be positively influence
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to
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their life and
the
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society.
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