Some people believe that young people bring more profits to a company. Others say that older people actually bring more profits. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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divided between whether a fresher gives high performance or an experienced one in a company.
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length in
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paragraph. I will give my opinion after explaining
both
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of
views
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.
Firstly
, a youngster performs better as he is more connected with newly developed
bussiness
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business
ideas
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he learnt from his/her college
whereas
older employee has less sense of those concepts. Another reason is that
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youth
is ease
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it using
latest
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technology which is
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in
case
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of older
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.
Furthermore
, a
new comer
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may work for less salary than an experienced employee.
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, a recent survey shows
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how big companies save their money by recruiting newbies. On the other an experienced worker can quickly resolve big issues
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because
of his knowledge.
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a company can save
its
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money that it spends
for
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training
of
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freshers.
Finally
,older
persons
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have more ideas that can be
benificial
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beneficial
for a
start up
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.
For instance
, a famous cricketer has opened his own cricket academy after retiring. It is
his
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concepts
those
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he developed during his journey
of
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cricketer
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that
has
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brought his academy a grand success. In conclusion,
both
points have their merits and demerits. In my point of view,
tt
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is advisable that a
bussiness
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business
should
be
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blend of
both
types
employee
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employees
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so that their good qualities can have
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impact on
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oraganisation
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organisation
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