The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country betwewn 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

#show #changes #ownership #appliances #amount #time #housework #households #country #betwewn #information #features #comparisons

✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?

As an introduction, these line graphs illustrate the percentage of electrical home appliances and the amount of time allocated for

the

Correct article usage

apply

show examples

household works in a country, between the period of 1920 to 2019.

Overall

Linking Words

, there was a significant increase

Change preposition

show examples

the numbers of electrical

equipments

Change the wording

equipment

types of equipment

pieces of equipment

show examples

during that period, which led to a dramatic reduction

Change preposition

show examples

the time spent

for

Change preposition

show examples

daily household duties.

Although

Linking Words

in 1920, the percentage of refrigerators was almost zero, it rose dramatically up to 100% in 1980

Remove the comma

apply

show examples

and remained the same

thereafter

Linking Words

Moreover

Linking Words

, the number of

vaccum

Correct your spelling

vacuum

cleaners, which was 30% in 1920, increased considerably up to 100% in

year

Change the article

the year

show examples

2000.

Eventhough

Correct your spelling

Even though

in 1920, the most popular product was the washing

mechine

Correct your spelling

machine

, which was 40%, it increased slowly reaching about 75% in 2019 and remained the least available item comparatively.

Lastly

Linking Words

, the total number of working hours has

been

Unnecessary verb

apply

show examples

dropped from 50 to 10 hours per week from 1920 to 2019.

Submitted by anushka75 on Tue Apr 25 2023

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Vocabulary: The word "numbers of" was used 3 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.

▼

Vocabulary: The word "dramatic" was used 2 times.

▼

5
Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
11
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

0123456789.0505

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

154 words

🚀 Prepare for IELTS writing section today!

Unlimited Task 1 & Task 2 checks
Practice with essays, charts, and letters.
Personalized suggestions & mistake analysis
Spot every mistake and boost your score.
Topic ideas & vocabulary helpers
Expand your ideas and use the right words.
Progress tracking
Watch your writing improve with every practice.

Topic Vocabulary:

electrical appliances
household
technological advancements
accessibility
ownership
sociocultural factors
economic factors
time management
efficiency
lifestyle change
pattern
anomaly
prediction
innovation
labor-saving devices

What to do next:

Look at other essays:

7.5
band
Some people think that governments should spend money on railways. Others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.
In contemporary society, transportation has become increasingly prominent. While some governments argue that funds should be used to improve railways, some argue it shoud rather be invested into new roads. Personally, I strongly advocate the former view. However, this essay aims to analyse the impact that railways have on the environment and society, while also looking at how alternative roads can benefit private car owners.
7.5
band
In many countries, people are now living longer than ever before. Some people say an ageing population creates prblems for governments. Other people think there are benefits if society has more elderly people. To what extent do the advantages of having an ageing population outwegh the disadvantages?
In the foreseeable future, the prevalence of digital platforms is anticipated to diminish the demand for traditional printed newspapers and books. While some argue that this shift will render physical publications obsolete due to the convenience and cost-effectiveness of online access, I firmly believe that printed materials will endure, albeit in a reduced capacity.
5
band
University should offer to choice one subject to students instead giving multi subject . To what extend do you agree with or not?
It has become a universal debate that University's should allow achievers to choose one unit rather than giving them multi unit course. I strongly agree that multi subject approach is the best one as they can get exposure to each field. In the following essay we will discuss about the multifacet course's pros.
6.5
band
Some people say that children should be involved in making schools' rules. Some argue that adults should be in charge of making rules. Discuss both view and give your opinion.
The topic of regulation in schools must be done by parents or students has led to divergent perspectives among individuals. This essay will examine both sides of the argument before reaching a reasoned conclusion.
6.5
band
Only 20% of Tech Jobs are Held by Women. What problems do women face that prevent them from getting these jobs and what must be done to change this situation.
These days, global thinking is changing from female; however, we can see that 20 per cent of Tech Jobs are Held by Women. In this essay, I will discuss the main problems which women cannot get this kind of jobs; moreover, I propose some possible solutions to avoid them.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country betwewn 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Some people think that governments should spend money on railways. Others believe that there should be more investment into new roads. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

University should offer to choice one subject to students instead giving multi subject . To what extend do you agree with or not?

Some people say that children should be involved in making schools' rules. Some argue that adults should be in charge of making rules. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

Only 20% of Tech Jobs are Held by Women. What problems do women face that prevent them from getting these jobs and what must be done to change this situation.