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The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

Many people think there should be fewer weekdays and more weekends. Personally, I could not agree more with
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 idea. I strongly think that in
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 way you can have more energy to do other things and much more time to spend with your family or friends. Currently, weeks have seven days and only two of them you do not have to go to your job. If
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 were not the case and there was an extra day off, workers would have much more energy and perform better on their jobs since they would have been able to recover their strength during
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 period and , in
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 way, be more focused on their tasks.
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, I once skipped work on a Friday because it was a holiday, and the following week I felt much more energetic, which was reflected in the improvement in the quality of my performance. A longer weekly break
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 has a clear impact on your time and makes you more relaxed and happy when you return to work.
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, even if you do not have anything to do on your days off,
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 extra day gives you the opportunity to spend more time with loved ones or to invest in yourself by pursuing your favourite hobby or simply relaxing.
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, a study by the French psychologist Bertrand Pariset states that after more rest during the week, returning to work becomes more enjoyable
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 an increase in happiness and calm.
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, I firmly believe that more rest is necessary as it helps you feel more energetic and much more relaxed upon your return to your job.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • productivity
  • burnout
  • motivation
  • mental well-being
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • pollution levels
  • traffic congestion
  • consumer spending
  • economic implications
  • leisure and service sectors
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