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Over-reliance on modern technology means that people are failing to learn, or are forgetting, many basic skills. To what extent is this true? Are people becoming so reliant on modern technology that they are no longer able to do some things without it? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, it is often suggested that modern
technology
 occupy our everyday life and become for us
very
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 essential thing.
Also
, these individuals argued that we slightly become incapable to study and start to
forgetting
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 typical
skills
. From my perspective, I agree with
this
 statement.
However
, we cannot underestimate
advantages
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 which are
providing
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provided
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 by modern
technology
. So, in
this
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 I will
further
 explore
this
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In
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 the one hand, in some
terms
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 modern
technology
 is harmful
for
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to
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 us.
To begin
 with , modern
technology
 provides
dengerous
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dangerous
 information which can cause
digrodation
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degradation
 of our mental state.
In other words
, when we have
problem
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 with
mental
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our mental
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 state we do not have
ability
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the ability
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 to learn something new
our
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or
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 practice our
skills
.
Furthermore
, when we spend a lot of time using modern technologies we do not have
desire
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the desire
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 to exercise our
skills
.
In addition
, modern technologies produced various websites, applications or programs which
are distract
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 us every time when we need to do something.
For instance
, when we acquire a new skill or
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try
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 to get
knowledges
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knowledge
pieces of knowledge
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.
On the other hand
, there are some advantages of modern technologies. Paradoxically, people can gain more new
skills
 online than in real life. I mean that when we
online
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 we have more resources.
For example
 , YouTube, Instagram, Google, etc. In these applications more information and every time we can search for it .
Moreover
, we can practice our
skills
 online with other individuals or just by
ourself
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ourselves
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 in the special apps.
Lastly
, we can learn online
to
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.
For instance
, read e-books, watch lectures, read articles or even have online lessons with a teacher. In conclusion, opportunities which are provided by modern
technology
 are not always useful and appropriate.
In contrast
, if it is possible to get over all the disadvantages, there will be only the benefits that remain
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