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Nowadays a large amount of advertising is aimed at children. Some people think this can have negative effects on children and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Over the
last
 decades, there have been immense advances in advertisement business and most of them have attempted to get
children
's attention. It is believed by some that it has been influenced negatively to them by advertising companies.
However
, each coin has two sides. In
this
 essay, I will explain why it should not be let them announce
products
 in front of them. First of all, in the modern world, advertising companies' goals are obvious
which
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 have been chosen to get
children
's attention easily. It is clearly seen that
children
 have been affected in a wrong way by
this
 kind of company. For ,example when they are going to a store
specially
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 for
children
's toy side, there are placed lots of
products
such
 as cars, dolls and other interesting stuff. These sorts of
products
specially
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 and logically located on Youtube channels when they are watching their movie or any type of cartoon they are easily look at them, and
then
 of course they are going to require to buy them. In
this
 situation, parents are really fed up with all advertisements. Some researches show that a number of parents proceed to have complained about all these companies.
Secondly
, in my point of view, it
also
 has a lot of useful sides which are so imperative.
For instance
, many of them use advertisements perfectly in a good term where they have declared in journals or on the internet in order to buy new books and new student equipment
as well as
 they introduce their technological
products
 that in
this
 day and age, many students use plenty of tablets at school.
To conclude
, it illustrates that advertising has
also
 a positive
effect
besides
 a negative
effect
,
,
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however
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 it is going to impact in a wrong way when lots of people tend to buy all stuff for their
children
.
To conclude
, it illustrates that advertising has
also
 a positive
effect
besides
 a negative
effect
,
,
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apply
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however
Add a comma
,however
show examples
 it is going to impact in a wrong way when lots of people tend to buy all stuff for their
children
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Targeted advertising
  • Psychological development
  • Artificial needs
  • Unhealthy eating habits
  • Materialism
  • Consumerism
  • Parental responsibility
  • Critical thinking
  • Informative content
  • Economic implications
  • Revenue generation
  • Content creation
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