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Express your overall enjoyment of last week’s event. Explain why each potluck dish needs a list of ingredients. Describe how the potluck could be differently organized next year.

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Dear Canada Day community picnic organizer, Thank you for the wonderful
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 weekend. I had an enjoyable time interacting with the community on
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 an important celebration in Canada. I noticed on the day that participants did not include a
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 of
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 for the dishes they brought to the potluck. There are individuals including myself who have some food allergies
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 as those related to nuts and seafood. The allergies can in some cases be fatal which is why a
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 of
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 would be helpful to better assist individuals to make the right food choices based on their allergies. May I suggest that for the
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 next year,
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participants are requested to supply a
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 of
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 to go with the dishes they bring to the potluck to avoid any issues that may occur from an individual eating a tainted item that may aggravate their food allergy
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 I believe that having the
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 of
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 will be widely received and will mean that people can be more involved in the
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 and try the various dishes without risking their health. Thank you for your consideration and I look forward to another wonderful
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 next year.
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