Some people think that charity organizations should only offer help to people of their own country. But others believe that these organizations should give aid to people in great need wherever they live. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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Some

people

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argue that donation firms must deliver their help to those in greatest need despite the

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borders,

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some believe that it should be allocated to local citizens.

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essay will explain both perspectives and examine why I side with allocating

charity

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people

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who need it the most.

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one

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hand, helping local

resident

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could empower local

donors

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to continuously spare their money on a

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as they can see direct impacts on their communities.

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, one area struggling with

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education system will get the opportunity to progress if there is enough money to increase facilities,

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as adding a library and introducing some technologies at school. Allowing

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charity

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charities

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to take part in

this

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issue will significantly help children to get a better education through newly introduced facilities.

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, if charities are distributed to foreign land, the local

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unable

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to see the immediate impacts, and it might discourage them as they could question the accountabilities of the

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bodies.

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, despite the possible advantage above, I would argue that

charity

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should be allocated based on urgency level regardless of where they live. One of the most significant reasons is

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humanitarian principle which means that

people

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deserve to get help despite the

nation

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borders. To illustrate, when Tsunami hit Japan, all countries collectively give

aids

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aid

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to victims and survivors because they need hands with medical supplies, access to clean water, and clothing. In

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, they become vulnerable and sufficient

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help

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could determine between life and death. Another reason for

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is that international

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organizations

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such

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as UNICEF will always target children worldwide, which means that they will focus on uplifting children’s lives no matter where they live.

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, the type of each

charity

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determines how the money will be distributed, and most international firms with sufficient

donors

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will focus on giving

aids

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aid

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to those in greatest need. In conclusion, donations specifically directed to home countries are mostly

due to

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empowering local

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and limited budgets.

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charity

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must be given to

people

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in greatest need because of humanitarian values and the type of

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body. I

am remain

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fully convinced to side with the latest arguments.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Complete response

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