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Countries are becoming more and more similar because people are able to buy the same products anywhere in the world. Do you think this is the positive or negative development?

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Nowadays, people around the world can buy similar
products
 because countries almost look the same. In my opinion, there are numerous disadvantages of
this
 development, and I want to
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To begin
 with, it is crucial to be different
than
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 others,
due to
 it makes each
country
 unique by including traditional things.
For instance
, by linking
iteams
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items
teams
 with customs and traditions,
such
 as
,
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 painting the
products
 with
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symbol
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 which shows that the
country
 is unique.
Therefore
, it is crucial when it comes to buying
products
,
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 because by making own
products
,
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 and develop the
country
.
Nevertheless
, it can be said that being similar
with
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 others is
a
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key
for
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development
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the development
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 of
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 certain
country
,
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 because buying
products
 online leads to
the
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fast information about the world.
For example
, people are able to find out the
upwarding
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upward
 trends, which would be great
in
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 finding
ne
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new
products
. In conclusion, I believe that being similar
with
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 other countries is not suitable, because every
country
 should be unique in their way and make their own
products
, by including tradition, in
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 to improve their
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • globalization
  • diversity
  • homogenization
  • cultural assimilation
  • global connection
  • local businesses
  • economic impact
  • consumerism
  • standardization
  • westernization
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