The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

The line chart illustrates the

number

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of shop closures and openings during the

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period

of 2011 to 2018.

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,

in

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the most of time,

instead

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of starting additional

stores

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, there were more

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closing over the 8 years.

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with, in 2011, it seemed to be an awesome start with approximately 8,500 new shops

opened

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and only 6,500 closed.

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,

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2012 to 2014, the

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of shop closures

were

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much more than openings.

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, the total

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of

stores

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went down

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during

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that period. Even though more shops were open and less than 1,000 were closed in 2015, that brought minor helps to

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commercial market. In 2016, about 5,100

stores

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were closed and it

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remained stable for the next 2 years.

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, merely 4000 shops were open in 2016, and the

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even declined as time passed by. Especially in 2018, it reached

lowest

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its lowest

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point at only 3000.