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Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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We live in a world today where some people argue that saving wild
animals
 from extinction is a waste of cash.
This
 essay totally disagrees with that statement, I believe that protecting
animals
 is one of the duties of mankind Protecting different breeds of
animals
 isn't a waste of money and there are various arguments to support
this
 point of view, first of all, before considering the costs of protection, human beings have no right to decide which creatures live or die in
this
 planet, God created
this
 beautiful earth for all of his creations and wild species are surely one of them.
Secondly
, the money
that is
 devoted to
such
 activities usually comes from donors and other associations for the protection of
animals
;
therefore
, the budget of the state won't be affected,
for example
, in Central Africa, the operation of protecting Lions from becoming extinct is supervised by a charity association called Protec.
Moreover
, people already pay fees in order to enter zoos
as well as
 natural habitats in order to see
Animals
,
thus
, government can use
this
 income as a resource to provide the necessary means for
animals
 to survive.
Furthermore
, humans are already damaging the planet with Global Warming and to
this
 day we are not completely sure of its consequences;
therefore
, it would be careless to
also
 participate in the extinction of some species not knowing what could be the outcome,
for instance
, a documentary on CNN warned us about the potential dangers of the extinction of penguins on the food chain in the North Pole.
To conclude
, there is a variety of arguments for and against protecting wild
animals
;
however
, I think that it is a necessity for humans to make sure of the survival of each species on earth.
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