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Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Traditionally, every
country
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's goal is to increase their economic
growth
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 but giving importance to other
goals
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 ,
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, gender equality, and generating employment are
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 other
goals
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 that should be paid attention to.
To begin
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 with, there is nothing wrong about giving importance to economic
growth
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 as if there is economic
growth
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country
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's income would be more and
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 will lead to an increase in GDP
growth
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Moreover
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,Moreover
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 economic
growth
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 leads to the generation of employment which helps numerous people in getting jobs and helps them in providing basic necessities. People who think about other progress are
also
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 not wrong. So a
country
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 cannot have economic
growth
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 as its only objective. A
country
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 should
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 concentrate on social
development
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 and environmental
development
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. For ,instance if I were a citizen of a
country
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 I would like that
country
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 to promote gender equality, promotes environmental
development
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 like the creation of new parks etc. A
country
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 should be able to achieve all essential
goals
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 apart from just economic
development
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.
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 is very necessary as economic
growth
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 cannot provide citizens with all the satisfaction. So a
country
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 should clearly mention and achieve the
goals
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 in order to maintain
development
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.

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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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