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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic. Many governments think that economic progress is their most important goal. Some people,however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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Traditionally, every
country
's goal is to increase their economic
growth
 but giving importance to other
goals
 ,
for instance
, gender equality, and generating employment are
also
 other
goals
 that should be paid attention to.
To begin
 with, there is nothing wrong about giving importance to economic
growth
 as if there is economic
growth
country
's income would be more and
this
 will lead to an increase in GDP
growth
. ,
Moreover
Add a comma
,Moreover
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 economic
growth
 leads to the generation of employment which helps numerous people in getting jobs and helps them in providing basic necessities. People who think about other progress are
also
 not wrong. So a
country
 cannot have economic
growth
 as its only objective. A
country
 should
also
 concentrate on social
development
 and environmental
development
. For ,instance if I were a citizen of a
country
 I would like that
country
 to promote gender equality, promotes environmental
development
 like the creation of new parks etc. A
country
 should be able to achieve all essential
goals
 apart from just economic
development
.
This
 is very necessary as economic
growth
 cannot provide citizens with all the satisfaction. So a
country
 should clearly mention and achieve the
goals
 in order to maintain
development
.
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