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You eat in your college cafeteria everyday lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college manager . In your letter, •explain what you like about the cafeteria •say what is wrong with it •suggest how it could be improved

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Dear Sir or Madam, The other day,my friends and I went to a mint restaurant near our study after school. There was a very large bright exterior that was beautiful,but the internal atmosphere does not meet the requirement, first of all,the ordered items are slow to arrive,
customers
 wait a long time and
customers
 are not looked after by a single waiter, an empty waiter looks after them, the menu has few dishes and is very expensive, the dishes are different and the music on the Tv is loud. People could not sit and talk freely and again, there is no atmosphere in which the young decorator falls into the picture of a person who cannot go there and sit down.In my opinion, restaurants should have an enjoyable atmosphere and
customers
 are treated with courtesy,orders are delivered on time,and when the TV programs are muted, visiting
customers
 can relax. I think that if the appearance is colourful and beautiful, it will attract people’s attention, and if every restaurant has a children’s playground, it will be a success for mother and child,if the dishes on the menu are more and cheaper, the number of
customers
 who come to the restaurant will increase and it will be more profitable. I look forward to hearing your reply as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, Rayhona
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