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The internet has transformed the way information is shared and consumed, but it has also created problems that did not exist before. What are the most serious problems associated with the internet and what soluitons can you suggest?

#internet #information #soluitons
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 has developed in a different way and it has changed to learn knowledge
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 a long time.
However
, it tends to cause some issues in
this
 day and age. In
this
 essay, I will argue what are the most imperative issues and how
it
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 can dissolve. In the past, most
people
prefered
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preferred
 to read plenty of books and newspapers which they
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had
an
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importance
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 to gain information about news,
last
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published
 romance. Over the
last
 decades, with the creation of the
Internet
, all kinds of books have lost their value.
Moreover
, most
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people
 are
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 to acquire
a
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knowledge of any topic from
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internet
 sites or
wikipedia
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 where there are an abundance number of fake news. Nowadays, some methods have been
creating
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 by authors in order to
motiviate
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motivate
 individuals to get information from vital sources which they want to learn. In
this
 case, getting
wrong
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knowlegde
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knowledge
 can easily be erased and
people
 lead to
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 these issues and tend to use the
Interner
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Internet
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 efficiently.
In addition
, a number of applications have been created on some reliable platforms
such
 as Podcast. There have been immense
advanses
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advances
 in
this
 application where
peaple
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people
 enable to
listen
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 several
audio books
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audiobooks
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 even if they are able to buy
a
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eletron
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electron
electronic
 book from Amazon.
To conclude
, the
Internet
 absolutely altered gaining
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data
 in
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 and it has made some problems. It is obvious that
people
 should not believe all things on the
Internet
 and they have to attempt to learn them from confidential resources.
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