Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they grow older
It seems argued that most
parents
provide their children with everything they desire and also
grant them the liberty to carry out decisions without supervising them. This
essay will discuss why I believe this
is not an appropriate method of upbringing as it can result in overdependence and other menaces.
One commonly cited benefit of buying children everything they so desire is that it raises their self esteem
Add a hyphen
self-esteem
especially
for kids who Add the comma(s)
,especially
suffers
bullying from peers and whose Correct subject-verb agreement
suffer
self confidence
has been shattered through peer pressure. Add a hyphen
self-confidence
For example
, in a study carried out amongst teenagers in a correctional institute in Lagos, Nigeria, it was found out
that 90% of adolescents who suffer low Change preposition
apply
self esteem
were able to boost their confidence after showering them with gifts and giving them autonomy to perform various activities. Add a hyphen
self-esteem
In addition
, most guardians allow their kids do
whatever they want so that their kids can feel loved and trusted as most youngsters these days believe that denial of their freedom is a lack of trust from their Fix the infinitive
to do
parents
. So most parents
over indulge
their wards as means of expressing their heartfelt love towards them.
Correct your spelling
overindulge
However
, lavishing youngsters with luxuries and giving them undue permission can make them to
become Change the verb form
apply
over dependent
on their guardians as they would not be able to purchase basic necessities for themselves especially when they are Add a hyphen
over-dependent
matured
to do so and are no longer under their Replace the word
mature
parents
tutelage. Change to a genitive case
parent's
parents'
For instance
, a child who is used to receiving expensive from his parents
might not be able to fend for himself after the demise of such
parents
. Furthermore
, if a child is not getting the luxury he is accustomed to, he may engage in dubious activities such
as stealing, prostitution or gambling in order to meet up with previous
lifestyle.
In conclusion, I believe providing children with everything they need has Correct pronoun usage
his previous
it
benefits. Change the pronoun
its
However
, such
practice can make young individuals to
rely on their Change the verb form
apply
parents
excessively and engage in shady activities when desires
are not met.Correct pronoun usage
their desires
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