Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for, and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children? What consequences could this style of parenting have for children as they grow older

It seems argued that most
parents
provide their children with everything they desire and
also
grant them the liberty to carry out decisions without supervising them.
This
essay will discuss why I believe
this
is not an appropriate method of upbringing as it can result in overdependence and other menaces. One commonly cited benefit of buying children everything they so desire is that it raises their
self esteem
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especially
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for kids who
suffers
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bullying from peers and whose
self confidence
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has been shattered through peer pressure.
For example
, in a study carried out amongst teenagers in a correctional institute in Lagos, Nigeria, it was found
out
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that 90% of adolescents who suffer low
self esteem
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were able to boost their confidence after showering them with gifts and giving them autonomy to perform various activities.
In addition
, most guardians allow their kids
do
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whatever they want so that their kids can feel loved and trusted as most youngsters these days believe that denial of their freedom is a lack of trust from their
parents
. So most
parents
over indulge
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their wards as means of expressing their heartfelt love towards them.
However
, lavishing youngsters with luxuries and giving them undue permission can make them
to
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become
over dependent
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on their guardians as they would not be able to purchase basic necessities for themselves especially when they are
matured
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to do so and are no longer under their
parents
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tutelage.
For instance
, a child who is used to receiving expensive from his
parents
might not be able to fend for himself after the demise of
such
parents
.
Furthermore
, if a child is not getting the luxury he is accustomed to, he may engage in dubious activities
such
as stealing, prostitution or gambling in order to meet up with
previous
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lifestyle. In conclusion, I believe providing children with everything they need has
it
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benefits.
However
,
such
practice can make young individuals
to
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rely on their
parents
excessively and engage in shady activities when
desires
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their desires
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are not met.
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  • indulgent
  • entitlement
  • discipline
  • responsibility
  • nurturing
  • self-reliance
  • adversity
  • autonomy
  • validation
  • dependence
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