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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities.
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The bar
chat
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chart
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 illustrates the outcome of
investigation
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an investigation
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 carried out to know how
people
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 buy
coffee
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,
tea
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and tea
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as well as
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 their drinking habits among five Australian cities measured in percentage
Overall
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, it is evident that
people
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 in four different cities preferred to have their tea or
coffee
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 in
cafe
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a cafe
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however
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,
people
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 in Adelaide demonstrated less interest
while
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 fresh
coffee
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 is less preferred in all the cities Moving forward, the Number Of
people
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 who preferred going to shops for tea and
coffee
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were
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 highest among Melbourne and Hobart which stood at above 69% of the data.
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, folks in Sydney
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 almost the same interest but slightly above 60% compared to Brisbane beverage drinkers which stood at 60%
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, coffee with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey results
  • coffee and tea buying habits
  • instant coffee
  • fresh coffee
  • cafe culture
  • social influences
  • economic factors
  • city demographics
  • seasonal trends
  • marketing strategies
  • consumer preferences
  • availability
  • popularity
  • consumption patterns
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