Some parents buy their children whatever they ask for and allow their children to do whatever they want. Is this a good way to raise children What consequences could this style of parents have for children as they older.

Guardians believe
purchasing
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anything their
kids
ask from them and giving them the opportunity to behave how they want, leading to the puzzle of if
this
is an appropriate way to train a
child
and which can
also
result
to
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the effect
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effect
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like greediness on the
child
. To start with, allowing
children
to behave
however
they want is not an appropriate way to train them,it is the duty of a guardian
is
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to watch over their
kids
and direct them in whatever they do, so they won’t make mistakes in life.More
also
buying everything the
child
ask
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of
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is not appropriate, in
a
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case
of
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if
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the parent is not
bouyant
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buoyant
enough, there is no need
going
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extra
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miles
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to get want the
child
wants.
Furthermore
,
children
sometimes get requests for things that are not necessary to them at that moment maybe because their friend has a particular article they might want to get
such
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for themselves even if it is not important to them.
However
,
such
parenting has brought more harm to their
kids
than good , when a
child
requests
for
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an article all the
times
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time
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and is always given, when it is not available that
child
becomes greedy and
indulge
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in lifestyles not befitting for them to
met
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up with their demands,
also
when
children
are always allowed to go places without being watch by their guardians some
kids
loose control and keep friends not suitable for them.
Furthermore
, some
kids
grow up to become lazy to work because everything they asked for is always at their disposal, they believe their parents will always be there to cater for
thier
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their
need,
some
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children
begin to live an extravagant life because their guardians always provide for them so believe the money is easy to come by. In conclusion, parents should not give their
kids
free opportunity to
do
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behave how they want because some might end up choosing the wrong path
due to
lack of direction and
also
getting every they want leads to an extravagant life in the future.
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  • indulgent
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  • adversity
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