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Pie chart showing different jobs and salaries of Anthropology graduands in the past five years. Analyse the table and write on the important points

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The pie chart depicts the diverse employment status of Anthropology
graduands
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 the table shows their different monthly income spread across five years as measured in percentages.
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, it is shown that most of the
graduands
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 settled for a
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time
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 job,
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 is followed by those with
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part
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time
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 and the unknown, with the least being those with
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time
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work
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 plus
post graduate
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 study.
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, the table shows that the Government
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 has the highest paying
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 the private companies had the least.
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, the pie chart revealed that a huge number of the Anthropology
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 secured
full
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time
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 jobs after school at 52%,
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 is followed by 15% who chose to
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 on
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part-time
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time
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 basis, 12%, formed the unemployed group, 5%, decided to
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as well as
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 return to school on
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part-time
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time
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, 
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full
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time
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 post
graduands
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 and the unknown shared 8% respectively.
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, the table reveals the earnings of these
graduands
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 spread across five years and under their various establishments. For those in the freelance industry, 5% of the total
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work force
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 earned less than $50,000, 15% earned $50-74,000,
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 those  that earned within the range of $75-100,000 and above formed 40% of the group. For the Government
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 only 5% earned below $50,000, 15% earned between $50-74000, 30% were within $75,000, 
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 the largest group at 50% took $100,000 and above making the
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 the highest paid amongst the rest.
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, in the private
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, the highest number of staff at 35%
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 below $75, 000, 30%
earns
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 $100,000 and above,
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 10%
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 less than $50,000, making them the lowest paying establishment.
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