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Pie chart showing different jobs and salaries of Anthropology graduands in the past five years. Analyse the table and write on the important points

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The pie chart depicts the diverse employment status of Anthropology
graduands
,
while
 the table shows their different monthly income spread across five years as measured in percentages.
Overall
, it is shown that most of the
graduands
 settled for a
full
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time
 job,
this
 is followed by those with
part
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time
 and the unknown, with the least being those with
part
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time
work
 plus
post graduate
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 study.
On the other hand
, the table shows that the Government
sector
 has the highest paying
graduands
,
while
 the private companies had the least.
To begin
, the pie chart revealed that a huge number of the Anthropology
graduands
 secured
full
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time
 jobs after school at 52%,
this
 is followed by 15% who chose to
work
 on
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time
 basis, 12%, formed the unemployed group, 5%, decided to
work
as well as
 return to school on
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part
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time
, 
while
full
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time
 post
graduands
 and the unknown shared 8% respectively.
Additionally
, the table reveals the earnings of these
graduands
 spread across five years and under their various establishments. For those in the freelance industry, 5% of the total
work force
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 earned less than $50,000, 15% earned $50-74,000,
while
 those  that earned within the range of $75-100,000 and above formed 40% of the group. For the Government
sector
,
while
 only 5% earned below $50,000, 15% earned between $50-74000, 30% were within $75,000, 
while
 the largest group at 50% took $100,000 and above making the
sector
 the highest paid amongst the rest.
Finally
, in the private
sector
, the highest number of staff at 35%
earns
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 below $75, 000, 30%
earns
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 $100,000 and above,
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 10%
earns
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 less than $50,000, making them the lowest paying establishment.
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