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Smoking not only harms the smoker but also those who are nearby, there fore smoking should be banned in public places. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Smoking is injurious to the health of a smoker and
also
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 to passive
smokers
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 it should be prohibited in public areas. I strongly agree with the statement and in
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 ,essay I will be talking about the same. First and foremost, smoking cigarettes or any kind of smoke can be crucial to the health of the person. It destroys the cells of the lungs making it inefficient to work properly inviting several respiratory tract diseases.
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, the demand for cigarettes is in increasing trend
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 of which patients with COPD, heart failure and various diseases associated with the lungs had drastically shoot-up.
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 the article published in the national daily in Feb2023,10 100 active
smokers
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 are suffering from lung cancer and one or more family members got different conditions associated with the respiratory system.
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,smoking in public places affect the mental health of the
people
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 nearby. The one who is smoking might find pleasure but
people
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 around may find irritation and suffocation.Nowadays, there is
special
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 provision for
smokers
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 and
non
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non-smokers
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smokers
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 in restaurants, seminar halls and other places just to avoid the harmful effect on common
people
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.
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, let's take a scenario of restaurants where 10
people
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 are having lunch including the smoker and non-
smokers
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. It is very obvious that the room will be filled with smoke and non-
smokers
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 can get irritated. In ,conclusion smoking should be prohibited in public places as it affects
people
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 physically and well as mentally not only active
smokers
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 but
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 passive ones.
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