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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish

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professional, they need to do some years of training. Some believe that they need to
work
 to develop their
country
 and some views say that they can
work
 in every
country
 they want. In
this
 essay, I will describe both views and my honest opinion.
Doctors
 and
engineers
 are important to a
country
. In
Indonesia
, the demand for
doctors
 and
engineers
 is still higher because we are a developed
country
.
Engineers
 are needed for better infrastructure for
this
 nation.
In addition
, some of the great buildings and roads were built by them. The development is not stopped but always develops to become a great
country
.
Moreover
, many places still need help for better health, especially in East
Indonesia
.
For example
, in my city, Sorong, we just have one doctor who specialized in the heart. It is very hard for Sorong netizens because they need to get a long line to meet a doctor, proving that we still need
doctors
.
However
, many
doctors
 and
engineers
 said they want more experience, and the other reason they do not get a good income in
this
country
 is because of underpaying. For illustrate, many countries
such
 as Japan, Canada, and Germany offer advantages of those jobs
such
 as a better salary and health insurance.
As a result
, they choose to
work
 in other countries. In my honest opinion, I agree that
doctors
 and
engineers
 should be required to
work
 in
Indonesia
, where they are getting the training
,
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 because society needs help, and we need those jobs to make
Indonesia
 a great
country
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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