Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think thia is a positive or a negative development?

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increasing number of masses having health problems
are
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prefer
alternative
medicine
and treatment
instead
of visiting Their usual doctors. I believe that there
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both advantages and drawbacks
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situation. To commence with, In these days a lot of people those having health
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have
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alternative
medicine
which they have at their home except to go for
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to
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. To elaborate
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,
sometime
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it
have
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more advantage
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drawbacks. If there is any emergency situation and
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are
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far from your place you can have
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first aid if you have much information about it.
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it
also
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money and time.
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,
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doctor who
have
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a major emergency cases
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his time is more important for them.
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, there
is
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also
many drawbacks
of
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having medical treatment
on
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alternative
ways. To explain
it
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, sometimes a person who
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have much knowledge about
medicia
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media
medicine
and
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a
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wrong tablet can be very dangerous for his health.
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, having inaccurate
medicine
can damage
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organs. So, whenever we have a
medicine
we should have awareness
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it l.
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, there is both advantages and disadvantages
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using
alternative
of
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medicines and treatment. If We have
much
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information about
medicine
in that case we should use them
otherwise
we should consult with a doctor.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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