The computers are widely used in education and some people think that teachers do not play an important role in the classroom. To what extent do you agree???

In
this
modern era, technology is globally used in educational sectors and a few masses believe that mentors do not perform an essential
part
in the
classroom
.I completely agree with
this
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extent that
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involvement is decreased because of modern technology.
To begin
with, In these days new technologies become an important
part
of every field of life
as well as
in learning institutions.that's why
teachers
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role in
educational
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department becoming less.
However
now a days
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students prefer to use
online
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the online
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course
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courses
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to enhance their knowledge. To elaborate
it
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, most
of
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the
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individuals don'
t
need
of
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mentors
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help they can easily get from online
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one click.
For example
, if we want to make a model of electricity we can easily watch online videos and complete it.
On the other hand
,
teacher's
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teachers'
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involvement becomes less because of new gadgets. But we don'
t
agree that
teachers
have no importance in
classroom
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the classroom
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.
For instance
, In online
classes
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,classes
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If we can'
t
understand any concept we can'
t
ask
to
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anyone but in other
way
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ways
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in
classroom
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we can easily ask
to
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our
teachers
.
Additionally
,
teachers
also
play
essential
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part
in maintaining
the
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peaceful environment.
However
, we can learn
this
kind of ethical education from tutors.
Hence
,
although
technology become a crucial
part
in
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educational sectors
but
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teachers
also
play
important
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an important
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role. We can easily get their help in
classroom
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the classroom
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.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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