Most teenagers today own a smartphone. Provide your opinion to discuss the advantages and disadvantages.

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technological era ,
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component of our life . Today almost a myriad of kids have their own
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and cons
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my opinion in subsequent paragraphs and conclusion respectively. Commenting
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the merits of digital
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,these aid child to learn new skills and assists in studies
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essential to pop up with the rapidly changing environment. To elucidate ,
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the aid of
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SNS like YouTube,Facebook , Instagram and so on help to attain new skills
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this
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childrens
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, children today can easily study with the
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like YouTube ,
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aap and so on. Moving
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, with the drawbacks .
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often
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mobile
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indulged in bad habits
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the resources which they get in
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way and
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unproductive activities.
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these digital
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have a detrimental effect on
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which various kids are wearing spectacles.
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example ,
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survey was conducted by a renowned educational institute that today out of 10 , 8 teenagers wear spectacles
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overuse of
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To recapitulate, these mobile
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have several merits like aid in studies , assists to attain new skills,
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,
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teenagers often
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and indulge in bad and unconstructive activities
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have a bad effect on eyes . In my opinion, every technological upgradation is essential to pop up
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dynamic environment
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if parents keep a strict check on their
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so no chance to
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the technology and
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children
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would enjoy the positive side of
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phones
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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