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Describe two maps with changes between 1967 and 2001.

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The given maps illustrate the changes which had been done for the Felixtone to develop its layout. To summarize, Felixtone had undergone a transformation by replacing natural areas
into
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an urbanized areas
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 with new public facilities over around three decades. First and foremost, on the north
side
 of the map a major area the farmland made way for several surrounded separate places as a swimming pool with the
hotel
 in its right corner covered by two private tennis courts.
Moreover
, shops located along the High Street from the right
side
 were transformed into an apartment.
Nevertheless
, the layout of northwestern of the Felixtone remained almost untouched between 1967 and 2001 leaving the golf course the same and adding a couple of shops.
Furthermore
, the south
side
 was changed significantly over the 34 years. Starting in
west
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, the rural area with several trees were have been expanded by planting trees and had appeared wind turbines. Next to the resort area the
hotel
 in 1967 had been demolished and by 2001 built a big car park for car users with the new
hotel
 just above the car park on the right
side
.
Besides
 these changes, the Marina bridge with boats to access the sea had disappeared creating
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 border to separate public beaches and a new private beach demolishing the fish market which was located on the opposite
side
 of the old farmland. The only thing which had stayed out of transformation is the café next to the
hotel
.
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