The amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spent and received in one year, 2016.

There are two pie charts which provide data about children's charity revenue sources and their expenditures which have been spent and received in 2016. Looking from an
overall
perspective, it can be seen that donated food is the majority of the charity
income
. Meanwhile, in the
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expenditures
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the biggest amount of money has been spent on
program
services.In the details the total
income
and
expendentures
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expenditures
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almost
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the same. In the revenue
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the largest is Dinated food ( 86,6 % ).
Next,
is community Contributions which is considerably smaller than
previous
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resource (10,4%).
Also
, there is
program
revenue (2,2%).
Lastly
, there are left the smallest resources there
are
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Investment
income
(0,2%), Government Grants ( 0,2%) and other
income
(0,4%). In the
another
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category of
Program
Services. The biggest amount of money has been spent on
program
services ( 95,8%). Other sources were significantly smaller almost
in
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a
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ten times.
First
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one was
th
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the
Fundraising resource (2,6%). The
last
was the
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Management
Mamnagment
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management
and General resource (1,6%)
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising events
  • expenditure
  • administration costs
  • program expenses
  • direct benefits
  • indirect benefits
  • underprivileged children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • shelter
  • nourishment
  • medical treatments
  • basic needs
  • financial sustainability
  • transparency
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