Some people say that adversiting is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Nowadays advertisements are everywhere, and reduce us to purchase goods. Many

people

believe that

ads

have huge success on

people

's attitudes but others conflict with

this

statement by saying commercials are so popular and even cannot attract us.

this

essay would discuss both views and provide examples. Marketing still has an influence on

people

to persuade them to buy things. a lot of adverts create artificial wants.

People

often buy things not because of real want, but

due to

the effect of ,

ads

they think they should have or they need it.

For example

, when someone sees

ads

on the internet regularly, which is adverts by influencers or bloggers contribute to what he or she feels is needed already.

moreover

, MacDonald's is a worldwide brand and their

ads

on billboards, posters or on the internet are everywhere, they want to catch the costumer's eyes and they feel hungry. So the ultimate aim of commercials is to subtly persuade

people

to buy things.

On the other hand

, the spread of advertising leads to losing charm and attention, especially since there are fewer creative

ads

these days so when

people

see them on social media skip them or even see them as posters or billboards. they ignore them.

Besides

people

dosen't have any trust in companies'

ads

anymore because companies in order to attract the attention of consumers make

ads

. So

people

find them irritating. In my point of view, too many

ads

are distracting and useless which leads me to ignore them.

To sum up

ads

still affect

Change noun form

people's

show examples

people

decisions but companies should improve their marketing skills.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
2Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
1Grammar mistakes
 

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266 words

6.50

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

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Topic Vocabulary:

persuade
promote
attract
influence
impact
consumerism
commercialism
market
product
brand
endorsement
manipulative
saturated
overwhelmed
repetitive
distracting
irrelevant
exaggerated
misleading
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