Some believe that engaging in an active pastime does more to develop life skills than time spent reading. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many people in modern societies believe that gaining skills and experience in life have more

benefit

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than spending all 24/7 reading. My opinion,I partly disagree with

this

view because the existing of skills and reading can help one community or company to improve themself. There are several reasons that experience and reading can help them together. If someone just studies in his house and read about the best knowledge in the world, he will not improve himself or other people around him. Because studying alone will not be able to advance science.

in contrast

, if you just start working and get

experiment

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after high school, you have to learn from the simplest things in society.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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2Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Grammar mistakes
 

2 paragraphs

115 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

Self-discipline
Interpersonal skills
Kinesthetic learning
Cognitive development
Empathy
Resilience
Dexterity
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Some believe that engaging in an active pastime does more to develop life skills than time spent reading. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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