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A rise in the standard of living in a country often only seems to benefit cities rather than rural areas. What problems can this cause? How might these problems be reduced?

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Over the past few decades, technological advancement has significantly improved the standard of living for
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, unfortunately, the majority of
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 improvement is confined
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cities
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 and the rural areas are still undeveloped. In
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 essay, we will discuss the possible issues
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 can create and some potential solutions. The mammoth urbanization of
cities
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 and ignorance of the villages will lead to an imbalance within the country. Whereby, the population in the
cities
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 will benefit from the latest technologies, healthcare, education and transportation means, and the
people
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 from the rural area will be spending difficult lives without any luxuries.
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 might fuel the feelings of inferiority complex within the rural population
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 and
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 might become a reason for their emotional and mental turmoil.
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 the productivity from the rural side would be reduced, having a detrimental impact on the country's economy. In order to address
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 issue, governments and local bodies should devise a carefully-thought plan to keep a balance between
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 and villages. The benefits provisioned to the
people
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 living in the urban areas should
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 be available to the village folks. They should have equal rights to medical facilities, education and other luxuries enjoyed by the city
people
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 will instil a sense of belonging in the
people
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 from the countryside. They will be contented with their lives and
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 their productivity will improve, contributing positively to the country's economy. To recapitulate, it is undeniable that
cities
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 have been the main focus for modernization and villages have been ignored in
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 regard. Adequate steps need to be taken to bridge these differences for the betterment of the
people
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