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Some experts say for road safety cyclists should pass a test before being allowed on public roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
 modern era, people use a variety of transportation
such
 as automobiles, trains, motorcycles, bicycles etc. Some commentators perceive that the bicycler should
give
Verb problem
take
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 a test before being permitted on public roads because of road safety. I will throw some light on
this
 notion. I will support my stand with pertinent arguments in upcoming paragraphs and
thus
 will lead to a logical conclusion at
last
. To
initiate
Verb problem
begin
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 with, there is decrement in bicyclists and more usage of fuel vehicles so global warming is increasing day by day. From an environmental perspective,
this
 move is not beneficial. Apart from that, as per the people, the government can apply that rule that's why some of them who ride
the
Correct article usage
apply
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bicycle
Fix the agreement mistake
bicycles
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 will shrink because the authority should not apply the unimportant rule.
In addition
 to that, the cabinet should focus on another facility which is transportation and they should increase it so bicycler is able to commute easily and quickly.
Moreover
, the government should apply rules for stunt men who do stunt with a cycle on public roads against them they should take action.
On the contrary
, The main reason behind there is more chances of an accident. For a compatible example, a few masses can not able to ride bicycles so they can't
give
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take
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 the test they don't have a licence and are not allowed to drive cycle on public roads
therefore
 there is less chance of an accident. To recapitulate, I will pen down by saying that,
as a result
 of applying the mandatory rule of gaining a licence some of the people who drive the bicycle will shrink.
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The essay strays from the task topic and lacks development of ideas. It needs to stay focused on the given topic and support the arguments with relevant examples.
coherence cohesion
The logical structure of the essay is weak. The introduction and conclusion are vague and do not effectively present the arguments and the essay lacks cohesion. The essay should follow a logical structure and maintain cohesion throughout.

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