social media has compeletly changed the way family and friends communicate with each other. what are the reasons for this? is it a positive or negative development ?

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has become a paramount platform to
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everyone together which included family members in
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modern era. It is often argued that the
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usage of social
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caused by several reasons and will lead to a negative impact
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society.
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, as to whether it is a blessing or curse, there arises a heated debate among people. As far
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concerned, people always love using social
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because it is convenient and user-friendly but in the long-term
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it actually carries the potential to create health concerns in
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society.
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, over 90% of Malaysian
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social
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platforms as the main communication key.
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fact that older folks have no other options but to accept the adaption of new-norm in order to continuously have a conversation with their grandsons.
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, the functions
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have actually superseded the traditional messaging system
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without charging a single cent
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reason, I think it is understandable a fact that why social
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has received a higher
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of
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compared to the traditional one. Unfortunately, people
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to create a stronger addiction towards social
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.
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, Apple has recently released
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average screen time on social
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by teenagers
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8 hours daily. Another
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is that teenagers
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amount of time on virtual conversations rather than physical
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will soon find out
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to communicate in
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reality, which we
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as isolation. Moving forward, researchers have
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proved that the development of technology has caused the risen of cataract issues in
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society
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of glaring on the screen will actually cause detrimental to the eyes. In conclusion,
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increases the usage of social
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but the drawbacks shouldn’t be denied
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and psychological issues.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Instant messaging
  • Multimedia content
  • Constant updates
  • Long-distance communication
  • Reconnection
  • Milestones
  • Cyberbullying
  • Quality of interactions
  • Face-to-face communication
  • Over-reliance
  • Misunderstanding
  • Privacy concerns
  • Support systems
  • Community pages
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