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You are studying at a college which has very limited sports and leisure facilities for students. Write a letter to the principal. In your letter; outline the situation propose ways to improve this situation request a meeting to discuss this Begin your letter 'Dear "Do not write any addresses”

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Dear Sir Arthur, I am writing to bring to your attention a crucial issue concerning our college.
While
 the students are generally satisfied with the academic curriculum and teaching methods, they have expressed concerns about the lack of adequate sports and leisure facilities. These amenities are vital for the holistic development and success of individuals.
Although
 the college campus has basketball and football courts, they are in a state of disrepair and are unusable.
Additionally
, the indoor swimming pool is
also
 out of order and
therefore
 inaccessible.
Moreover
, the cafeteria facilities are in
a
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deplorable condition, forcing students to seek lunch options outside the college premises. We respectfully request that you allocate sufficient funds for the renovation of the sports facilities and cafeteria. Our students have brainstormed several innovative ideas for the refurbishment, which we would like to present to you at a mutually convenient time for a detailed discussion. Thank you for your attention to
this
 matter. Sincerely, Carol P.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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