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The plans below show the site of an airport now and how it will look after redevelopment next year. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. write 150 words

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The diagrams depict information about the current airport and the future development plan.
Overall
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, there are major changes
will
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that will
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 occur in the presented
lay out
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layout
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 redevelopment plan. There will be a numerous number of parking
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area
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areas
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 for planes
as well as
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 additional shops for
the
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apply
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peoples
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people's
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 convenience like bag drop, ATM machines, and
coffee
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shop
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, and a space for
car
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cars
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to hire.
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 to that the current walkway will be replaced with
sky
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a sky
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 train. The recent airport shows an almost bare structure that
on
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in
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 the departure
area
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it
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apply
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only has
coffee
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 a
shop
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, apart from the
check in
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check-in
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 counter on the west wing. Before entering and leaving the
gates
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, both sides
has
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have
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 security and passport control (departure and arrival
area
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). Crossing the customs there is a walkway for people prior
entering
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to entering
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 the 8
gates
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.
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, as observed after redevelopment the airport underwent significant physical changes. The check-in counter in the departure
area
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 will be replaced with
bag
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a bag
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 drop;
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the check
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check in
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check-in
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 counter will be relocated to the right side where the
coffee
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shop
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 is previously settled,
then
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 placing it near
to
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apply
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the gate. At the same time arrival
area
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 will have
ATM
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an ATM
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 machine and
coffee
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shop
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on
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in
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 the south part and new car hire as well.
Whereas
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, the gate notably expanded from 8
gates
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 to 18
gates
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 making room for more planes, and changing normal
walk way
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walkway
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 to sky trains.
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,
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apply
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 Security and passport control remained the same.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • terminal
  • runway
  • refurbishment
  • redevelopment
  • amenities
  • car park
  • hangar
  • concourse
  • public transport hub
  • access roads
  • boarding gates
  • check-in desk
  • baggage claim
  • departure lounge
  • observation deck
  • duty-free shopping
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