The chart below gives information about how families in one country spenttheir weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spenttheir weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart compares the proportions of weekly income spent on eight categories in a country in 1968 and 2018 respectively.
Overall
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, the percentage of money spent on most of those categories declined,
while
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the citizens spend more part of their salaries on recreation.
It is clear that
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the percentage of expenses on most of those items went down over the 50-year period. The expenditure on food was the primary one and accounted for 35% in 1968.
However
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, it had seen a significant decrease to 17% by 2008.
Moreover
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, the proportion of the income spent on fuel and power, clothing and
footware
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footwear
and personal goods slightly declined in the same period as well,
by
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4% to 5%.
However
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, some of those categories increased during the given period. It is noticeable that people spend more part of their income on leisure, from 9% to 22%.
Similarly
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, people tended to allocate more budget
on
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housing and transport, which rose from 10% to 19% and 8% to 14%
seperately
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separately
. What's more, the proportion of expenditure on
household
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households
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remained stable at 8%.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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